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A poem i wrote..
« on: September 26, 2004, 06:19:42 pm »
Hey, what do you guys think of this poem i just wrote?

Wound

Tears would flow freely from my eye,
Like blood from a wound, but I cant remember why.
Seems I have forgotten already,
From burying my head in my bedding.
It will scar. I know it will,
Because I will be emotionless, untill,
This deep, cavernous hole is filled.
Still strong, am i,
I thought as we vowed our last goodbyes.
Alas, not one tear did i shed,
Its not like i weeped and weeped and weeped in my bed.
For i am still strong, and strong i will remain,
Because the voices have finally shut up,
The ones inside my brain.
I will come back for more,
But this time I'll be stronger than before.



(Note, a reference to MaSu at the end :))

EDIT *reads through and realises its crap..*
« Last Edit: September 26, 2004, 06:30:51 pm by Fallout »

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #1 on: September 26, 2004, 08:06:42 pm »
im crying just reaidn it :'( :P well almost but not very nice very nice and the masy reference is mint  ;D
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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #2 on: September 26, 2004, 08:08:05 pm »
That is good. It's got feeling and all poetry should have that.

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #3 on: September 26, 2004, 08:10:32 pm »
Thanks :)

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #4 on: September 26, 2004, 08:51:07 pm »
eh, better than one i did in an english lesson a few weeks back, took a line straight out of winterstorm for it, great thing is no-one knew cept me :)

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #5 on: September 26, 2004, 10:17:20 pm »
Nice one.
Once enough of these poems come around we could have a Broken heart poems compo.
I have mine somewhere, have to upload it to me webshite someday.

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #6 on: September 27, 2004, 12:12:39 am »
I feel so... so... so angsty.

*opens a Deadjournal*
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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #7 on: September 27, 2004, 01:20:46 am »
 :o OMG! MAGICMAN IS BACK!!!!!!!!!
The basic instincts of all guys in the wild:
1) Get big sticks
2) SMASH THE SHISTA OUT OF THINGS
3) Make fire
4) Burninate

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #8 on: September 27, 2004, 02:38:39 am »
:o OMG! MAGICMAN IS BACK!!!!!!!!!
Magicman can't be back, because he never left.

He just took a parentally-caused hiatus. ;)
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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #9 on: September 27, 2004, 03:41:26 am »
hmm wut did u do that caused this hiatus?
The basic instincts of all guys in the wild:
1) Get big sticks
2) SMASH THE SHISTA OUT OF THINGS
3) Make fire
4) Burninate

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #10 on: September 27, 2004, 04:10:47 am »
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Let's make this an official poetry thread!


Wait... shit I don't have my poems saved on here. Well, when my bro is done with CS, I'll post some! ^_^

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #11 on: September 27, 2004, 11:58:18 am »
Poetry!?..

Yeah i think ill throw in my lyrics when i get home, its all poetry until you turn it into a song.. right?

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #12 on: September 27, 2004, 07:23:33 pm »
:o OMG! MAGICMAN IS BACK!!!!!!!!!

quick, get the eye blinds!

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #13 on: September 27, 2004, 07:29:41 pm »
O.o..

 i want MaSu to read my poem so i can see what they think :)

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Re:A poem i wrote..
« Reply #14 on: September 27, 2004, 09:03:01 pm »
And when they're at it, they can make it a mp3. Imagine Robert reading your poem! It's art... enhanced!